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Things having to be returned to their transparency:


       i.
       / green mist-earth / knit
        atmosphere / fathomless
        blue-lavender / lights
        spun out from light


        ii.
        are recalcitrance / and you
        are convergence


     & - a fingernail of summer
        - a melting of rain
        - a crown of flowers
        - a priest of sunsets


(beautiful? I love you, because. Zemi.
Zemi. are you beautiful because I love
you? Zemi?                                   )


       iii.
       I imagine this is what it's like to breathe sea foam
       over the Cliffs of Moher: hydration. absolution.
       To Rilke, it's a melody that floods over us
       when we have forgotten how to listen for it.
       I never could forget this: for how could I know
       my hand as both well and chasm? and how could I know
       time, a windstruck dimension, standing in her white street?


       iv.
       We go on morning walks and Zemi
       laughs at everything I say. He


       wears it on a cord
       around his neck when he sleeps:


       my omphalos of rainwater,
       hyacinthine blossom on his chest,
       his bioluminescence tearing on the glass;


       beneath him, the city
       rumbles and the infinite



       v.
       When we go home to zero, what seraphic voice
       will declare so clear our unbecoming?


       The places Zemi has been to, again there
       he will go,


       bipolar god of
       flickering lights,


       saint amid rain
       and incongruence.

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2.10.2013
lotsa more edits, mostly with formatting; ironed out some crinkled areas.
i loved this poem before, but now, god, i can't get enough of it.
is my obsession with it justifiable? is it as good as i think it is?
i want to read this forever.

reread the duino elegies; lots of rilke; had to re-edit.

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9.18.2012
lotsa edits; fixed the ending

Another DLD!? Yayy!
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Thanks so much to *beeinthebottle for suggesting and `thetaoofchaos for featuring!!

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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I feel like I'm lost in the ocean of your words, and when I come up to take a breath, I am beaten back down by yet more waves and tsunamis of all of the lovely things working in this poem. I think you are completely justified in your obsession, because I'm pretty obsessed with this, too! I'm glad to see it got a DLD and a few features: It is so beautiful and deserving!

i and ii are my favorites, I think: There is so many beautiful things at work, often unexpected or completely reinvented. I love how you reinvent the "standards" of poetry. I'm so used to seeing people stay within certain lines, but you are not afraid to break them and do such lovely things (a prime example of this definitely would be those two segments).

I was interested, though, in the word "Zemi." Is it a name? Or something different? It just managed to peak my curiosity, so I thought I'd ask!
I’m sorry I have no words. I’m still speechless, pretty much. I tried to find some appropriate words, but they still seem inadequate.
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Wordeea Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You have been featured in my journal [link] :sun:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Thank you!
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Your wonderful work has been showcased here, dear: [link]
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013
Thanks so much! :heart:
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So, I realize that you received a DLD on this, but I featured it anyway. [link]
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013
Thanks so much, it's an honor :heart:
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's well deserved. :huggle:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
& - a fingernail of summer
- a melting of rain
- a crown of flowers
- a priest of sunsets
I don't know why, but there's something about this that just makes the poem beautifully delicious to read! :love:

Kudos! :clap:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
Thank you so much! I agree. I think this is the most satisfying part of the poem. :heart:
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