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They say that the big bang was not an actual "bang". It was really just static. Static, like the interference of radio waves. Of course, the universe did not happen instantaneously. The big bang took 760,000 years to happen. 760,000 years of static, and bang, the universe happened.

I get myself together and actually go out. I go to see the New York Philharmonic perform the works of John Cage at Lincoln Center. I walk out during the second movement of 4'33". There's a very small difference between life and death. I walk home, my chin pulled down against my neck. I hum a constant note, providing myself with my own tinnitus.

I focus on this note. I cross Broadway where the walkers cluster on the curbside, awaiting the turn of the traffic light. People talking and the bioacoustic noises of their bodies moving. I walk against the signal. The tires of taxis scrape against the road. I go west on 65th Street, past Brooks Brothers and the slimy sliding of the revolving door, past vans parallel parked, past figurine trees planted in desolate squares of grey dirt, collecting wind. Bikes cling to the bike rack and the garbage bag whips in its pail. I walk past Le Pain Quotidien, the organic bakery that only has one table, one long table where everyone is supposed to eat together. A woman's high heeled shoes tap against the sidewalk. I walk past apartments with barred windows. I walk until I see a wall of green. This is Central Park West. I walk along the 65th Street Transverse Road. Two walls of green botanic wildlife rise up towards the sky, forming a pleasant container for the road and the sidewalk, a pleasant protection. Enclosed in shrubbery I would imagine the noises get quieter. Incorrect. They augment. They build even louder. They arise from the start and stop of the pacific traffic. The pressured whistle of brakes being applied. The staccato rhythm of footsteps. Behind me. Before me. A jogger's workout music through her headphones. A dog's whining. A car's window being closed. A bird's wings flapping in a tree, making noise. Music. Disorganized, timeless, sublunary music. I get to my apartment on the East Side. The polished floor of the lobby echoes every noise against the ceiling. The elevator beeps. I walk in. It whirs. Here I notice I am still humming.

Finally I am in my room and my room is carved out of silence. I sleep in an anechoic chamber, a room designed to absorb all sounds detectable by the human ear. Here, I can hear two sounds, one high and one low. The high one is my nervous system in operation. The low one is my blood in circulation. I can also hear a rhythmic scraping noise, one that sounds like the second hand of a clock, ticking, ticking, counting down to an inevitable end. The engineer tells me it is my heart chambers opening and closing. I can't help but believe it is something more sinister.

I lay awake most of the night. Finally, I hear my body silence as my mind drifts into sleep. I am on the brink of consciousness. Then, I hear a sudden sound. It is static. From the static forms a void. I fall asleep.
Edit: My fourth DD! It is a bit embarrassing to have so much attention focused on this little piece I wrote almost two years ago... and I never even fixed the ending!!

Ah, but still, I'm honored! Thanks so much to =futilitarian for suggesting and ^Beccalicious for featuring! You two are lovely - and thanks to everyone who faves and comments; you are lovely too!

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Taking suggestions on how to change the ending.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-12-30
cosmic background radiation by ~archelyxs ( Suggested by futilitarian and Featured by Beccalicious )
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Celeste-Cloude4evr Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm just speechless right now, I haven't read anything so good in a long time. the ending really got to me :heart: well deserved DD
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archelyxs Featured By Owner May 8, 2013
Thank you! :heart:
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Celeste-Cloude4evr Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no, thank you for the beautiful piece :heart:
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Karinta Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Did you base this from the story of John Cage's experience in the sensory-deprivation chamber? Because I like it.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner May 8, 2013
Yes!!
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neko2631 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
F*cking beautiful. I didn't run into anything in this that grated on me as I read it. I can count the number of written deviations I've been able to say that about on one hand, and I've been here since '03. I even had to look up two words you used (I love it when I have to do that).

THIS is art. Really well done.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
This is very flattering. Thank you so much! (:
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"From the static forms a void"--too lovely for words. I can't properly describe the feeling this left me with.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Ah, thank you so much!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Congratulation yet again on this one. I'm glad I don't listen to everything the way the subject of this piece does; it would be ghastly.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Yes... a blessing and a curse. Thank you so much!
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theMonsteroftheStory Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
People have been telling me I'm a writer, 'I have potential' for quite a while now. And while I appreciate their sentiments, I know they're completely false. Because I love, value, & respect the written word as much as any other art form. You my friend are a true author/writer. I usually don't get absorbed enough in a short story before it ends to really get much from it. But this was completely different, you had me at the first few sentences. As I said I'm only a literary fan, but I liked the ending. It wrapped it's way back to the beginning, coming full circle. And it didn't end in any loud way, it was subtle - I thought it was fitting. Those are personally my favorite type of endings, to each their own. Either way, thank you, it's appreciated.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
A writer is anyone who can move words around. It's not something you gain after achieving a set number of smooth phrases and it's not something you can wear about on your neck like a glowstick. Of course you're a writer! Writing is just really, really hard. It's the most difficult thing in the world.

Thank you so much for your kind words. (:
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theMonsteroftheStory Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And thank you for your very thoughtful response, I'll keep that in mind :idea:.
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Green-Day28 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love this so muchhhhh!
I love all the references to sound, to music, the anechoic chamber... The mention of John Cage made me go bananas (nerd mode activated..). I love how it all goes to serve the purpose of the story you're telling... That's my favorite part about writing: taking all these different bits and pieces and using them to reinforce the world or feeling you're creating. I must say, you do so beautifully.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Thank you so much!
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goose-fat Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
Congratulations on your DD!

"Here, I can hear two sounds, one high and one low. The high one is my nervous system in operation. The low one is my blood in circulation. "

Too perfect. :heart:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Thank you! That's my favorite part too!
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Dylexa Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Cool!
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Thank you! (:
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Dylexa Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
Np!
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catluvr2 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's interesting, I read it through again as if it was science fiction from a robot's pov. The line about the engineer made me think of that. Congrats on the DD! :+favlove:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Oh that's a terrific idea! I might have to read it again that way too.
Thank you so much for commenting! :coffeecup:
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Abraxas-within Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I absolutely love this. I judge the success of a piece of writing by how effectively it pulls the reader into it, so that they forget where they are and become totally immersed in the created world of the writer. This does this perfectly, and i love how you tied your ideas together at the end. I have had similar thoughts while drifting off to sleep, but i could have never captured them in writing as beautifully as you have here. Just wow.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Aww (: Thank you so much for your support! Warms my heart. :coffeecup:
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Abraxas-within Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! Your writing is great.
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Thank you! :coffeecup:
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Minkymy Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
This is amazing.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Thank you!
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Minkymy Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
You're really quite welcome indeed.
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aileen Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Best verbal representation of a "4'33"" experience I've ever heard or read. The tie-in with cosmic background radiation is eerie and apt. :nod:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Thank you so much! :coffeecup:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day and Happy New Year! :holly:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Thank you muchly! Happy new year to you, too! :coffeecup:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :santa:
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Really really beautiful. I read something like this and feel all the more flattered you pay any attention whatsoever to my writing. :) Congrats on the DD.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Daw, you flatter me, love! :hug:
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
:) Only the truth. :hug:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
Congratulations Megan! I liked having this wonderful little window into a day against the backdrop of the beginning of time and space.
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Ah, that's such a lovely thought! Thank you :hug:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
:heart:
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riparii Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Hey look who's here! Congratulations Megan!!
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Ah, thank you! :hug:
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CanveySue Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh my, I feel enlightened by your wonderful words. I love this, the fact is that you are an ocean away and yet I have had those thoughts too. A stunning piece of writing, and it has moved me, in the way that all great writing does. This is what Deviant Art is all about, and I am so pleased to have found your writing. :clap: :dalove:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Isn't that fantastic? It never ceases to amaze me either, the way that space and time can disappear so easily. Thank you so much for your kind words! I am flattered. :coffeecup:
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silvernium Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well hey - look at you with a DD! Congratulations! Do not take suggestions on how to change the ending. Do not do that. From here "I lay awake ....." do not change one word!
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Thank you so much! :coffeecup:
(I don't know. Ending a piece with someone falling asleep is just really kinda lame in my opinion.)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   General Artist
Your words leave my dreaming. Congratulations on the DD, love! :heart:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Ah, thank you! :coffeecup:
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